Add to new TZ like story

Zone1 · 07-12-2003, 04:54 PM

Submitted 4 your approval : One Mr.Rexx Rainnns

Location: Midwest
Rexx, in a dark suit, enters a night club and meets a woman wearing white, sitting at the bar, shes says :

( pls add to the story, thanx, I shall add on to later

)

Silver Dark · 07-13-2003, 01:33 AM

"Excuse me, do you have the time?"

Mr. Bevis · 07-16-2003, 07:01 PM

Rexx: "For you, angel, I've got all the time in the world."

Woman in white (smiling, amused): "What makes you think I'm an angel?"

Rexx (with a smile and a dry chuckle): "Oh, you can't fool me. I think I know an angel when I see one."

Woman in white: "Well, then, who am I to argue?" (as she arches her eyebrows seductively, her lips slowly unfold to reveal a dazzling smile)

Rexx: "Buy you a drink?"

Woman in white: ?

"Submitted for your approval, one Rexx Rains, age thirty-seven, who spends his days as a world-weary private detective and his nights as an attractively charming rogue; a man whose life has been sufficiently long and adventurous for him to conclude that he's seen everything under the sun. In the person of the woman next to him, however, he's about to meet someone whose knowledge and experience of the world's darkness make his own look like a new-born babe's by comparison, a woman who by means of her own patented charms will cause him to plunge head over heels into . . . . the Twilight Zone."

bry · 07-16-2003, 07:55 PM

bevis!!!!!!! what's shakin'???
good to see ya roaming around here. c'mon back good buddy. 10-4.
bry

Mr. Bevis · 07-16-2003, 08:25 PM

Hi, bry, I thought I recognized you from somewhere!

You must be back from your trip--welcome home. I want to thank you and our moderator Jenny (on another thread) for welcoming me here.

I'll be around.

Zone1 · 07-16-2003, 11:19 PM

Hey Mr B ( Beeeeevis ) Great to see you here!!!!

Hang around, and have fun. Cooolness

Thanx for dropping in, can not wait for a new tabulation

Wow, greeeat add on, you own this story,

Mr Z

PS : I like it here, Jenny is great and everyone else toooo

Mr. Bevis · 07-17-2003, 12:11 AM

Thank you Mr. Zone1, glad to be here!

I knew it was only a matter of time before we ran into each other over here. Check out your number episodes thread, where I give you full blame--ahem, er, credit, for inviting me over here.

Quote:

Originally posted by Zone1
I like it here, Jenny is great and everyone else toooo

Yes, everyone seems very enthusiastic about the Zone.

There's some real writing talent here, too, and a great set of emoticons (not necessarily in any order of importance

)

I'm thinking about where this story can go from here--any suggestions are welcome. What do you think about Rexx Rains--does he make it through the story alive? If so, how does he manage it?

(Great emoticon--must make mental note not to overuse that one.) I think the woman in white must be a devil, demon or witch of some kind, but I want to write that so as to offend as few sensibilities as possible (and still make it as good a "story" as possible). This story isn't about encouraging witchcraft or devil worship; it will be for entertainment purposes only.

Zone1 · 07-17-2003, 05:26 PM

Mr B
Nice meeting u in the twilight Zone,

. I am glad u r here, thanx 4 coming again.

I concur, great enthusiasm here, TZ is a play ground for intellectuals ( I hope to gain that status one day,LOL).

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Ironically, this story could come off as the opposite of the ep Mr Bevis, Where the woman in this story is no angel, and tries to make him do evil things ( this has been done b4, but we could twist the ending abit).

--OR---

Perhaps, she was a sad/cynical soul of a human that died, and needs to save Rexx to get her wings, Like in "Its a Wonder Life", but she actually falls in love with Rexx, which could deny her her wings, she is conflicted on if she wants to love him or save him. She decides she wants to be with Rexx. In the end,( the Supreme being) says that her loving Rexx actually saved both of them
( It was a test), and she returns to this plane of existence to marry/love Rexx, and they liiiiiive happily ever after.

Just one ideal. What do u think?

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Woman in white says: Why you are a gentleman, I am flattered.
( She says in a sultry tone, she seems to be toying with RR)

Rexx goes up to bar and buys 2 drinks, and places them on the counter in front of them.

Rexx: Here you are. ( Rexx says, staying cool, and smiles)

Woman : If I am an angel, hehe, what does that make you, my dear? ( The woman says while eyeing Rexx).

Rexx: ?

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Mr B, I can not see how u can overuse that emoticon

Maybe u can do like me, I use

alot, its all gooood

Mr Z

bry · 07-17-2003, 05:54 PM

"just a tired man that can't fit together the pieces of a case to save his life. but you're not interested in that. buy you another drink before i go?"
"what's your hurry? we just started getting to know one another." she watches him as he puts his coat on.
"no baby, i have work to do."
she watches him walk out the door.

minutes later, he gets on the subway to go home. and standing beside him, is the lady in white.

Zone1 · 07-17-2003, 06:35 PM

Hi BRY, great to see ya
great add on
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" I am a private eye, its my job to find answers, but I have no clue who you are or how you did that" Rexx is dumb founded.

" Rexx, I am just a woman" The woman in white declares.

" Whoooa, how the heck do you know my name, are you a spy or something, I 'm out of here, " Rexx pushes the emergency stop and runs out of the subway station. He runs into a pharmacy, to hide out.

" I have the cure for you" the woman says in a heavenly voice, standing next to him.

The woman says:
--------------

Hey BRY, where is Red Rooster? Is he here @ another tvlinks board?

Mr.Z

Mr. Bevis · 07-17-2003, 06:36 PM

"Oh, Rexx?"

Rexx stared at her. "How did you know my name?"

"Oh, I know a lot of things, Rexx. (pause) A lot of things about you, about people, oh, about almost everything really."

"Who are you?"

"You can call me . . . Nikki."

(The idea of making her an angel is interesting, too. I personally think making her evil would be more fun, but I think you should be the final judge of that, Zone1, since you introduced the story.

I also think that all things being equal, it might make the story more suspenseful if we delay saying exactly who or what she is, or whether she is good or evil, for as long as we can. I'll have to rewrite "Rod's" opening monologue to accomplish that. I'll do that later.)

Zone1 · 07-17-2003, 06:45 PM

Mr B and BRY

This story is going swimmingly,

Mr B, With your intro, it s your story, if u want to make her a devil, thats fine, it can be alot of fun

If u have not seen "A Nice Place to Vist",yet, u may not want to read next line sorry,spoiler::

Perhaps, she is fooling him to believe she is an angel but nvr says it, Like in "A Nice Place To Visit".
------------------------

Mr B, U can do what ever u want w/ it, as may BRY

Mr Z

I edited my above post, I hope that its better

bry · 07-17-2003, 11:32 PM

she looked like a nikki.
high heels, white dress, long flowing hair. the kind you'd like to get tangled up in. but i don't have time for that. "heres my stop".
he climbs the stairs to his flat and gathers his keys. he opens the door to find nikki in his apartment.
"well i 'll be an ebenezer scrooge...." how'd you get in here?".....

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try amos n andy or andy griffith show.

Zone1 · 07-22-2003, 05:13 PM

" Nice cartoon reference, Rexxy, thats what I adore about you, you are not typical... How I got in here, well, the door was open and so I decided to enter to see if anyone was home" Nicky said, but in actuality it was a lie, then distracted Rexx by lowering the sleeves of her Ivory white dress, exposing her cremey shoulders, and gestured to him to come hither, and stared into his eyes of azure.

Rexx wanted to drown in her eyes which were brilliant shades of chocolate, honey and brown sugar, he was falling for her, but then he pulled back and said " Even if that were true, I never told you where I live, who are you?!? "
" This is getting boring, Rexxy, I told you I am Nikki, what more is there to know? Now be a gentleman, and come sit on the couch next to me, theres much to discuss" Nikki demanded politely, as she afixed her gaze on his narrowed dark blue eyes.
Rexx, as if hypnotized does as she says, and she continues
" I have great plans for you, my dear," Nikki expels.

-----------------------
Maybe Nikki is a devil, and she persuades him to do things that seem benign, fooling Rexx, b/c in actually what she is asking him to do is bad. Whatdya think?
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( BRY, I have a short story abt Wrestlers in the TZ, sound good?)

bry · 07-22-2003, 09:15 PM

give it up ZZ. love to hear it. who is the star?

07-12-2003, 04:54 PM	#1
Zone1 Frequent Poster Member Join Date: Jun 17, 2003 Location: USA Posts: 71	Add to new TZ like story Submitted 4 your approval : One Mr.Rexx Rainnns Location: Midwest Rexx, in a dark suit, enters a night club and meets a woman wearing white, sitting at the bar, shes says : ( pls add to the story, thanx, I shall add on to later ) __________________ Peace be upon you

07-13-2003, 01:33 AM	#2
Silver Dark Occasional Poster Member Join Date: Jul 12, 2003 Location: Indiana Posts: 21	"Excuse me, do you have the time?" __________________ "What you're about to see is not a news broadcast."

07-16-2003, 07:01 PM	#3
Mr. Bevis Frequent Poster Member Join Date: Jul 15, 2003 Location: my own private and special Twilight Zone Posts: 122	Rexx: "For you, angel, I've got all the time in the world." Woman in white (smiling, amused): "What makes you think I'm an angel?" Rexx (with a smile and a dry chuckle): "Oh, you can't fool me. I think I know an angel when I see one." Woman in white: "Well, then, who am I to argue?" (as she arches her eyebrows seductively, her lips slowly unfold to reveal a dazzling smile) Rexx: "Buy you a drink?" Woman in white: ? "Submitted for your approval, one Rexx Rains, age thirty-seven, who spends his days as a world-weary private detective and his nights as an attractively charming rogue; a man whose life has been sufficiently long and adventurous for him to conclude that he's seen everything under the sun. In the person of the woman next to him, however, he's about to meet someone whose knowledge and experience of the world's darkness make his own look like a new-born babe's by comparison, a woman who by means of her own patented charms will cause him to plunge head over heels into . . . . the Twilight Zone." Last edited by Mr. Bevis : 07-16-2003 at 11:34 PM.

07-16-2003, 07:55 PM	#4
bry Forum Regular Member Join Date: Jan 20, 2003 Location: n.c. Posts: 809	bevis!!!!!!! what's shakin'??? good to see ya roaming around here. c'mon back good buddy. 10-4. bry __________________ that's Y-A-T-E-S.

07-16-2003, 11:19 PM	#6
Zone1 Frequent Poster Member Join Date: Jun 17, 2003 Location: USA Posts: 71	Mr BEVIS Hey Mr B ( Beeeeevis ) Great to see you here!!!! Hang around, and have fun. Cooolness Thanx for dropping in, can not wait for a new tabulation Wow, greeeat add on, you own this story, Mr Z PS : I like it here, Jenny is great and everyone else toooo

07-16-2003, 08:25 PM	#5
Mr. Bevis Frequent Poster Member Join Date: Jul 15, 2003 Location: my own private and special Twilight Zone Posts: 122	Hi, bry, I thought I recognized you from somewhere! You must be back from your trip--welcome home. I want to thank you and our moderator Jenny (on another thread) for welcoming me here. I'll be around.

07-17-2003, 05:26 PM	#8
Zone1 Frequent Poster Member Join Date: Jun 17, 2003 Location: USA Posts: 71	Re: Re: Mr BEVIS Mr B Nice meeting u in the twilight Zone, . I am glad u r here, thanx 4 coming again. I concur, great enthusiasm here, TZ is a play ground for intellectuals ( I hope to gain that status one day,LOL). ----------------------- Ironically, this story could come off as the opposite of the ep Mr Bevis, Where the woman in this story is no angel, and tries to make him do evil things ( this has been done b4, but we could twist the ending abit). --OR--- Perhaps, she was a sad/cynical soul of a human that died, and needs to save Rexx to get her wings, Like in "Its a Wonder Life", but she actually falls in love with Rexx, which could deny her her wings, she is conflicted on if she wants to love him or save him. She decides she wants to be with Rexx. In the end,( the Supreme being) says that her loving Rexx actually saved both of them ( It was a test), and she returns to this plane of existence to marry/love Rexx, and they liiiiiive happily ever after. Just one ideal. What do u think? ------------------ Woman in white says: Why you are a gentleman, I am flattered. ( She says in a sultry tone, she seems to be toying with RR) Rexx goes up to bar and buys 2 drinks, and places them on the counter in front of them. Rexx: Here you are. ( Rexx says, staying cool, and smiles) Woman : If I am an angel, hehe, what does that make you, my dear? ( The woman says while eyeing Rexx). Rexx: ? ------------------------------------ Mr B, I can not see how u can overuse that emoticon Maybe u can do like me, I use alot, its all gooood Mr Z

07-17-2003, 05:54 PM	#9
bry Forum Regular Member Join Date: Jan 20, 2003 Location: n.c. Posts: 809	"just a tired man that can't fit together the pieces of a case to save his life. but you're not interested in that. buy you another drink before i go?" "what's your hurry? we just started getting to know one another." she watches him as he puts his coat on. "no baby, i have work to do." she watches him walk out the door. minutes later, he gets on the subway to go home. and standing beside him, is the lady in white.

07-17-2003, 06:35 PM	#10
Zone1 Frequent Poster Member Join Date: Jun 17, 2003 Location: USA Posts: 71	Hi BRY, great to see ya great add on --------------------------------------------------- " I am a private eye, its my job to find answers, but I have no clue who you are or how you did that" Rexx is dumb founded. " Rexx, I am just a woman" The woman in white declares. " Whoooa, how the heck do you know my name, are you a spy or something, I 'm out of here, " Rexx pushes the emergency stop and runs out of the subway station. He runs into a pharmacy, to hide out. " I have the cure for you" the woman says in a heavenly voice, standing next to him. The woman says: -------------- Hey BRY, where is Red Rooster? Is he here @ another tvlinks board? Mr.Z Last edited by Zone1 : 07-17-2003 at 06:48 PM.

07-17-2003, 06:36 PM	#11
Mr. Bevis Frequent Poster Member Join Date: Jul 15, 2003 Location: my own private and special Twilight Zone Posts: 122	"Oh, Rexx?" Rexx stared at her. "How did you know my name?" "Oh, I know a lot of things, Rexx. (pause) A lot of things about you, about people, oh, about almost everything really." "Who are you?" "You can call me . . . Nikki." (The idea of making her an angel is interesting, too. I personally think making her evil would be more fun, but I think you should be the final judge of that, Zone1, since you introduced the story. I also think that all things being equal, it might make the story more suspenseful if we delay saying exactly who or what she is, or whether she is good or evil, for as long as we can. I'll have to rewrite "Rod's" opening monologue to accomplish that. I'll do that later.)

07-17-2003, 06:45 PM	#12
Zone1 Frequent Poster Member Join Date: Jun 17, 2003 Location: USA Posts: 71	Mr B and BRY This story is going swimmingly, Mr B, With your intro, it s your story, if u want to make her a devil, thats fine, it can be alot of fun If u have not seen "A Nice Place to Vist",yet, u may not want to read next line sorry,spoiler:: Perhaps, she is fooling him to believe she is an angel but nvr says it, Like in "A Nice Place To Visit". ------------------------ Mr B, U can do what ever u want w/ it, as may BRY Mr Z I edited my above post, I hope that its better

07-17-2003, 11:32 PM	#13
bry Forum Regular Member Join Date: Jan 20, 2003 Location: n.c. Posts: 809	she looked like a nikki. high heels, white dress, long flowing hair. the kind you'd like to get tangled up in. but i don't have time for that. "heres my stop". he climbs the stairs to his flat and gathers his keys. he opens the door to find nikki in his apartment. "well i 'll be an ebenezer scrooge...." how'd you get in here?"..... -------------------------------------- try amos n andy or andy griffith show.

07-22-2003, 05:13 PM	#14
Zone1 Frequent Poster Member Join Date: Jun 17, 2003 Location: USA Posts: 71	The Lady in White " Nice cartoon reference, Rexxy, thats what I adore about you, you are not typical... How I got in here, well, the door was open and so I decided to enter to see if anyone was home" Nicky said, but in actuality it was a lie, then distracted Rexx by lowering the sleeves of her Ivory white dress, exposing her cremey shoulders, and gestured to him to come hither, and stared into his eyes of azure. Rexx wanted to drown in her eyes which were brilliant shades of chocolate, honey and brown sugar, he was falling for her, but then he pulled back and said " Even if that were true, I never told you where I live, who are you?!? " " This is getting boring, Rexxy, I told you I am Nikki, what more is there to know? Now be a gentleman, and come sit on the couch next to me, theres much to discuss" Nikki demanded politely, as she afixed her gaze on his narrowed dark blue eyes. Rexx, as if hypnotized does as she says, and she continues " I have great plans for you, my dear," Nikki expels. ----------------------- Maybe Nikki is a devil, and she persuades him to do things that seem benign, fooling Rexx, b/c in actually what she is asking him to do is bad. Whatdya think? --------------------------------------- ( BRY, I have a short story abt Wrestlers in the TZ, sound good?)

07-22-2003, 09:15 PM	#15
bry Forum Regular Member Join Date: Jan 20, 2003 Location: n.c. Posts: 809	give it up ZZ. love to hear it. who is the star?

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