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01-07-2005, 05:06 PM
For all of you Jo Polniaczek and Jinny Exstead fans of all ages, I've decided to give you a preview of my next fanfic idea, called "Jo's Murderer".
At the 1983-84 season, Jo was getting ready to go to college until a hooded predator garrotted Jo's throat and left for dead in the girls' dorm room.
In San Francisco, Jinny heard of the news and decides to leave the Division and go to Peekskill to visit Mrs. Garrett for information. But Mrs. Garrett, along with Blair, Natalie and Tootie mistook Jinny for Jo (Because they don't know Jo is dead).
One time, Blair spotted Jinny taking a shot of bourbon, and Blair said to Jinny (Blair think she's still Jo) not to take any of that stuff, but Jinny exclaimed that she's an alcoholic.
Once Jinny, undercover as Jo, smelled blood underneath Jo's bed, Jinny pulled the carcass from under the bed, and it belongs to the decomposing Jo.
Jinny begins to do some investigating on Jo's corpse at the morgue, and told the girls that the real Jo is killed and a hooded predator killed her.
One of the criminals is of course linked to Jo's death. Could it be...Andy Moffett? Pippa McKenna? Nancy Olson? Cindy Webster? Molly Parker? George Burnett? or...Boots St. Claire?
Whenever she finds the right culprit, Jinny will have a duel with who killed Jo.
What do you think?
01-07-2005, 09:14 PM
Sounds awsome, go for it!
01-07-2005, 09:41 PM
"Jo's Murderer: The Division/Facts of Life x-over"
JUNE 15, 1984
PLACE: EDNA'S EDIBLES, PEEKSKILL
In the living quarters of Mrs. Garrett, all four girls have breakfast before their big day.
JO: (In gray parachute pants and pink sleeveless top) Another big economics test at Langley for me.
BLAIR: (In expensive clothing) For me, another day Warner Industries. I got to sell my fashion designs to Bill Blass and Gloria Vanderbilt.
NATALIE: (Eating eggs) Me and Tootie are in for another hectic day at Music class.
TOOTIE: Yeah, they make to play musical instruments that were used by other guys, makes us sick.
JO: I can imagine. I'd like to sue the teacher and I'd make some music out of her.
Jo shows this by cracking her knuckles.
NATALIE: And maybe, you'd be our teacher and punish the guilty.
Jo looks at her watch and gathers her things.
JO: Almost time for me to go, and I want to go to powder my nose for a last time. (To Mrs. Garrett) Mrs. G, I'll be on my way as soon as I get cool.
MRS. GARRETT: OK, but don't take long. Last time it was 30 minutes.
JO: Yeah, yeah.
Jo runs upstairs. Blair gets her things and heads out, followed by Natalie and Tootie.
GIRLS: Goodbye, Mrs. Garrett!
MRS. GARRETT: Goodbye!
Mrs. Garrett goes to the storeroom to resume her business.
01-07-2005, 09:48 PM
Good so far keep it up!
01-07-2005, 10:15 PM
Jo runs to the bathroom of the girls' dorm room. She shuts the door and turns on her Walkman that is placed on her hips. She dons her headphones as she applies her lipstick as she sings.
JO: (To the hit song "Highway to Hell") Livin' easy, livin' free/Season ticket on a one-way ride/Askin' nothin', leave me be/Takin' everything in my stride...
As she was singing, a mysterious shadow forms on the shower curtain behind the tub. The shadow is like nothing we've seen. Now we see black gloves, and a garrote being tightened. Now we see the figure wearing a black bomber jacket with leather pants and a hood in the head. All black, I'm here to tell you.
JO: (Continues to sing) ...Don't need reason, don't need rhyme/Ain't nothin' I would rather do/Goin' down, party time/My friends are gonna be there too...
The figure gets out of the bathtub as the figure noisily opens aside the curtain, but Jo is engrossed with the noise. The figure lengthens the garrote cord...ready for the kill.
JO: ...I'm on the Highway to Hell...
The figure gets behind Joanne, and with the figure getting the garrote around Joanne's neck, she tries to scream and breathe. Jo is kicking as she tries to remember her streetwise brain, but this is not working. The figure keeps tightening the garrote around Joanne's throat until she is heard gurgling. Now, the slit is beginning to form through the garrote. Warm blood begins to trickle through the wound.
Until the blood has had enough oozing, the figure released the garrote, and drops Joanne on the floor, with a light blue complexion on her face and the blood oozing from the wound. Her eyes are wide open with her mouth to match.
The figure went to the main dorm quarters and opened the black leather body bag. The figure went back and dragged Joanne's carcass and puts her inside the body bag. The figure closes Joanne's mouth and eyes, and makes a Rest In Peace pose by placing Joanne's right hand over her chest, and her left hand over her right. Finally, the figure zips the body bag, and places the bag under Jo's bed to hide the evidence.
Now, the figure won't be able to clean any bloody spots. The figure has a packet of Cherry Kool-Aid powder. The figure went into the bathroom, made a concotion of the stuff, poured it down the sink, and made it as if Jo wanted to down the Kool-Aid before going to the bathroom.
Then, the figure went out the window.
01-07-2005, 11:37 PM
LATER THAT DAY
At the Bronx, Boots St. Claire walks casually to the newspaper stand. Boots brushes her long brown hair with her right hand as she looks at the paper that gets her eye. Luckily, she found a magazine with an ad from San Francisco.
BOOTS: (Reading with her shrill voice) "The Division of San Francisco specializes in crime solving. Want to hire us? Contact Jinny Exstead at..." (To herself) This will be good for a prank!
Boots wrote their phone number down on her notepad, and went out of sight.
IN SAN FRANCISCO
At the Division Agency, five inspectors are briefed on their latest cases by their superior, Captain Kate McCafferty.
CAPT. KATE: OK, inspectors. We got some cases to solve, and I want them solved on the spot.
We pan on five women. Jinny Exstead, Madga Ramirez, Raina Washington, C.D. DeLorenzo, and Angela Reide. Together, they're tough, but they got their own lives. The phone rings, and Kate answers it.
CAPT. KATE: (Speaking in phone) Division of San Francisco. (Pause) OK, I'll get her. (To Jinny) Inspector Exstead?
JINNY: Yes, Captain?
CAPT. KATE: Some shrill-voiced girl in some urgency.
JINNY: (Running to her own phone) OK, Captain. Hang up. (To the voice) Hello. Jinny Exstead. (Pause) We don't do cases in New York. Only in San Fran... (Pause) Okay...what's the town and address? (Writes the info) What's the case? (Pause) Got it. Meet you there. (Hangs up)
CAPT. KATE: What did the shrill voiced woman want?
JINNY: Damned girl wants me to solve a case in New York. Murder at some place called Edna's Edibles in Peekskill.
CAPT. KATE: Exstead, you know what the purposes are if you leave California to go to another state.
JINNY: I'd get kicked out if I don't return in a month. But I have to get this case solved!
CAPT. KATE: Alright, this is like playing a game of death. And this IS a chess game between YOUR work as an inspector and the Agency. You'd be likely to lose.
JINNY: I'm willin' to take that chance.
Jinny went and get her things, including a .357 Anaconda revolver and some booze.
JINNY: Bye girls. I'll contact you when I get to Peekskill.
The girls were giving complexed looks at each other.
SAME DAY - THE EXSTEAD APARTMENT
JACK: Darling, I don't think you can go to Peekskill by turning down the Division to do other cases.
JINNY: Spare me, Jack. I want to look into this case and I'm not going to leave New York without finishing it.
Jinny takes a slug of Jim Beam.
JACK: Jin, you're just being hard on yourself!
JACK: Please stay with Division for a while?
JINNY: (Another swig of Jim Beam) No damn way. New York is hell, and I have to do this case, and come back in one piece if I have to.
JACK: What if you get shot?
JINNY: I'm not scared of death. As long as I'm with a .357.
JACK: Not even guns can keep you safe. I hear in NYC that there's full of street bums, druggists...
JINNY: I handled those dudes before in San Fran! What makes you think I can be over there now?
Jack kisses her cheek.
JACK: I want you to be safe, Jin.
Jinny hears the taxi cab honking. She puts her black leather overcoat on, and says her final words to Jack...
JINNY: I'll swear that I'll come back to the Division. (Raising her right hand and left hand over her heart) I solemnly swear.
Jinny slowly walked into the hallway, and Jack watched Jinny go.
01-08-2005, 04:37 PM
BACK AT PEEKSKILL
AT EDNA'S EDIBLES IN THE NIGHTTIME
The girls and Mrs. Garrett sit and wait for Jo.
BLAIR: When is Jo coming back? I was supposed to help her with her home ec.
TOOTIE: I am concerned for her too.
NATALIE: I bet she went to the bar and got drunk. She'll get a big hangover, I'll guarantee you that.
MRS. GARRETT: NATALIE! (To the girls) I know we're all worried about Jo staying up late.
They heard someone knocking.
TOOTIE: That must be her.
Blair got to the door and opens it. It's Boots St. Claire.
BOOTS: Hello, hello, Warnsey!
MRS. GARRETT: Boots, what is it?
BOOTS: I believe I've found your little tomboy pal named Joanne Marie.
NATALIE: Where's Jo, Boots?
BOOTS: Ummm, I think I found her near the bar.
TOOTIE: I hope she isn't drunk!
BOOTS: Nope, she hasn't got any alcohol in her system. You can bet my brain on it!
Boots looks at her Swatch.
BOOTS: Oh my, look how time flies, girlies! I gotta go. Ta-tah!
MRS. GARRETT: Wait a minute!! You forgot to tell us...(Door shuts)...what she done to keep herself late...
BLAIR: Don't worry. I think she'll arrive before we know it.
At the same time, Jinny drives in a rented Mitsubishi Starion two door. Jinny reads the info she wrote.
JINNY: Edna's Edibles...Must be a couple of blocks up.
Jinny switches the radio knob on. Laura Branigan's hit "Hot Night" comes on. Jinny starts to sing to keep her mind off of her life.
JINNY: The need in your eyes/Hits me to the heart/With a shot of stimulation/Come on with me/In a moment I will see/Such a burnin' fascination...
As she continues singing, she drives straight on the road.
JINNY: No stoppin' it now/We got to stay in motion/We're 2-foot of fire/2-foot of emotion...
Jinny finally reaches Edna's Edibles. She parallel parks her rented Starion near the sidewalk. She kills off the engine, and gets out. She picks up her briefcases, and closes the door. She double-checks to see if the door is locked, and it is. Jinny heads for the front door. She knocks on it.
At the house, Blair hears another round of knocking.
NATALIE: I hope it's not that squeaky voice Boots again.
TOOTIE: Maybe Jo came back.
BLAIR: I'll see.
Blair went to the door and opens it.
JINNY: A woman named Boots St. Claire told me that a case needs to be solved here.
Mrs. Garrett and the girls appalled when they saw Jinny wearing straight hair, red shirt, black slacks, and a black leather overcoat.
What will happen next? Identity crisis? To be continued.
01-09-2005, 05:12 PM
I really like it, Keep up the good work
01-09-2005, 05:39 PM
More! I like like it~
01-09-2005, 05:46 PM
The girls and Mrs. Garrett went agape at Jinny's appearance...but they still think she's...
GIRLS AND MRS. GARRETT: JO?!
Jinny sets her suitcases down and tries to set it straight.
JINNY: You must be mistaken for one of your colleagues. I'm really...
BLAIR: (Cutting her off) Where were you tonight, Jo? Boots St. Claire told us...
JINNY: Boots ordered me to come here and...
TOOTIE: Jo, what have you done to yourself? You went up and got your hair dyed and have a different do? (To Mrs. Garrett, aggressive) Mrs. Garrett, did SHE have the money to buy this?!
NATALIE: Well, Tootie, you can't be rich for all eternity. (Admiring Jinny's leather overcoat) Wow, is this real leather, Jo?
JINNY: Yes. And my name is...
BLAIR: I LOVE this leather overcoat! I think I gotta buy one and make a design out of it!
Jinny, getting furious, now lets it all out...
JINNY: THAT'S ENOUGH OF THIS CRAP! (Cools down) Now, I gotta find a place to relax and solve the case for tomorrow.
MRS. GARRETT: Jo, this is not like you! And why are you so vulgar?
BLAIR: Yeah, I thought you were my friend for life, Jo.
JINNY: I am TIRED, and I need a drink.
MRS. GARRETT: I'll mix you girls some hot cocoa.
When Mrs. Garrett leaves for the kitchen, Jinny unzips her bags, and pulls out a box, some paper bags with bottles inside.
TOOTIE: Jo, what you got in there?
JINNY: I almost had it with you women. Wish I was back in San Francisco.
BLAIR: You don't have any life in San Francisco!
JINNY: (Pulling out a bottle of Hennessy) Instead of that sweet stuff, this is what I need. I'll drink this later IF I have to.
BLAIR: Jo, you know this stuff is bad! You'll get addictted to it and you'll...you'll...
JINNY: I've been in AA, and was a recovering survivor. Now, with you women dissing my life, I can drink again.
Jinny goes upstairs with her bags, a box, and the brown bags with alcohol.
JINNY: (Offvoice) I know where the dorm room is!
Mrs Garrett came back with a tray of cocoa.
MRS. GARRETT: There you are, girls. (Looks around) Where's Jo?
TOOTIE: Jo's acting weird.
NATALIE: Jo's starting to think she's really drunk.
BLAIR: Maybe you gals are right...Jo is drunk. I'd better go see what's wrong with her.
Blair goes upstairs.
01-10-2005, 04:15 PM
In the girls' dorm room, Jinny unloads her investigation stuff, her clothes, her wooden box, and some Hennessy to go with Jack Daniels on the side. She takes off her overcoat and throws it to what she used to be Jo's bed.
Jinny sits on Jo's bed, and uncorks the bottle of cognac (The Hennessy) and fills her shot glass full of it. As Blair comes in, she shes Jinny swallowing a shot of cognac.
BLAIR: Jo, if it's what you think you're doing...
JINNY: It's cognac, and it's good for me.
BLAIR: (Coming to Jinny) Jo, you don't have to drink it all.
Jinny opens up some Jack Daniels and pours it with the cognac.
JINNY: So what? I just came here to do a simple case, and all you girls want to do is to harass the hell outta me.
Jinny downs the concontion while Blair is shocked.
BLAIR: What's this simple case called, Jo? (Smirks) Have you been working as a detective all this time?
JINNY: I AM an inspector! Get it?!
BLAIR: How long? Since tonight?
JINNY: Since I was in my twenties. (Pours another drink) Wanted to be sober...
BLAIR: Jo, can you stop drinking that stuff?
Too late. Jinny downs another round.
JINNY: I am USED to alcohol, and my name's NOT Jo!
BLAIR: Yes, you ARE Jo. Real name: Joanne Marie Polniaczek. College you go to: Langley.
Jinny slams her shot glass, and opens the wooden box very cautiously.
JINNY: Get this straight, rich snob wannabe. I...am...
Jinny pulls the Colt Python .357 (The Anaconda is in another case by the way) from the box, and points the revolver at Blair's face.
JINNY: (Grits teeth) Jinny Exstead, inspector of the Division in San Francisco! My badge!
Jinny flashes her badge in her overcoat.
JINNY: There's your evidence!
Blair laughs as this was a practical joke.
BLAIR: Oh Jo, you're just playing detective to entertain me! What a ham!
Jinny gets over the edge and grabs Blair with Jinny's cross-armbar move she learned from her jujitsu.
BLAIR: Jo, I never thought you were THIS strong...and you are breaking my arm!
JINNY: What did I teach ya?
BLAIR: Uhh...you're...Jo Exstead.
Jinny puts another round of pressure.
BLAIR: Jinny Polniaczek...!!
Jinny puts MORE pressure till Blair's arm feels like it gonna break.
JINNY: What's my REAL NAME, dammit?!
BLAIR: JINNY EXSTEAD!! You're Jinny Exstead!!
Finally, Jinny releases Blair from that death move that would've dismembered Blair's arm.
The girls came in short notice to hear what the screaming is about.
TOOTIE: What's wrong, Blair? You were yelling!
BLAIR: This psycho...(Pants)...Jo thinks she's Jinny, and she IS drunk!
Jinny picks up her shot glass and pours another concontion. She did and gets the shot glass near Blair's lips.
JINNY: You'll know what being drunk really means...IF YOU DON'T SHUT YOUR YAP!!
NATALIE: Oh boy! Jo's getting at it with Blair! What an exciting story this will be!
Jinny picks up her Colt Python and aims it at Natalie's face.
JINNY: Why don't I shoot your tonsils out, see if you can't talk.
NATALIE: It's cool, Jo. It's cool.
Jinny picks up a smell that the other didn't notice.
JINNY: Do you smell blood?
BLAIR: Why no. The air is dry once I came in here.
JINNY: Well, it's starting to smell.
Jinny goes to her bag and gets her latex gloves on.
TOOTIE: (To Natalie) How did Jo get the money to buy that gun?
NATALIE: (To Tootie) Probably blew her college money and bought it just to defend herself.
The smell is getting stronger. Jinny felt something under the bed. It's made out of rubber.
JINNY: (Guessing) It's a body bag. Do you girls own a body bag?
MRS. GARRETT: (Running up) What's wrong? I hear something...
Blair gestures Mrs. Garrett to be quiet.
Jinny slowly pulls the body bag underneath the bed.
The gang sees the body bag in horror.
MRS. GARRETT: A body bag?! Oh my gosh, I hope it is not one of us!
BLAIR: Relax. With all four of us girls, there's absolutely nothing that can...
Jinny unzips the body bag, and finds a slowly decompsing corpse of...Joanne Marie Polniaczek. Joanne is in her pink sleeveless top, gray parachute pants, and her 80's hairstyle. She laid in a Rest In Peace pose. The scar on her throat is dried up, with little dried blood following it.
The girls are in shock, appallment, and sadness.
GIRLS AND MRS. GARRETT: JO!?
BLAIR: (Beginning to cry) Jo...is...dead?!
MRS. GARRETT: Jo is...murdered.
TOOTIE: Nobody killed Jo when we were here today!
Jinny looks at Jo's throat slit.
JINNY: This woman was killed...her slit was more like a few hours old. Beginning to dry.
BLAIR: Then you're really...
JINNY: (Solemn) I'm Jinny Exstead, girls.
TOOTIE: (Saddened) We're sorry we thought you were Jo...
NATALIE: (Crying) We thought this was a joke.
JINNY: (More solemn) It's okay. It was a first time I was mistaken for Jo.
The girls, Mrs. Garrett and Jinny bowed their heads for their fallen Joanne.
01-10-2005, 04:21 PM
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01-10-2005, 05:16 PM
A few hours later at Edna's Edibles, the police and the ambulance arrived. The medics wheeled Jo's corpse away to the ambulance van. As the coroner talks to Jinny about the crime, some friends came over to comfort the girls.
ANDY: I got here as soon as I could. Everything going alright?
BLAIR: No, Andy.
NATALIE: We didn't know who killed Jo, Andy.
George Burnett also arrived.
GEORGE: Hello, guys. Any news?
MRS. GARRETT: Jinny is just getting the news from the coroner.
GEORGE: Who's Jinny?
The girls point to Jinny talking to the coroner.
ANDY: Hey, is that Jo?
GEORGE: If that's Jo, she's cool with leather on.
Obviously, nobody was laughing.
BLAIR: (Head down) Jo's murdered.
GEORGE: Oh c'mon now, Jo is a victim of crime?
Jinny hears this and orders the medics to wheel back Jo's corpse inside the house.
JINNY: (Approaching George) Hello, I believe we haven't met before. I'm Jinny Exstead, inspector of the Division in San Francisco.
ANDY: You do look a lot like Jo.
GEORGE: (To Andy) I'm telling you, Andy. She really is Jo.
ANDY: Look at her hair.
As they are continuing their bet, the medics rewheeled Jo's body bag, and stops it before the boys.
JINNY: I got something to show you.
GEORGE: If it's your twin (Sarcastically) then I'll be in great shock. What's so important that I gotta look in that rubber bag for?
JINNY: (Advances to the bag) What's so important, goofball, is that the corpse of Joanne Marie Polinaczek (Unzips the bag) is dead. She had her throat slitted. The coroner said it was hours old in decomposition. (Rezips the bag)
ANDY: She was a cool looking gal. Rest in peace, Jo.
Jinny hugs Andy to show her sympathy.
JINNY: It's alright, kid. It's alright.
Jinny now advances to George.
JINNY: Now you see...as the old saying goes...no two people are alike.
GEORGE: Then Jo really is...
MRS. GARRETT: Did you call someone else?
TOOTIE: We got a hold of Pippa McKenna, Beverly Ann...
NATALIE: Cindy, Molly, Nancy. But we haven't got a hold of Boots St. Claire.
JINNY: Yeah...she was the one who told me about the crime...but never mentioned the victim's name.
BLAIR: That was strange...why didn't she mention Jo when this happened?
MRS. GARRETT: What I do know is that every one of us girls were doing our own thing when this happened.
The coroner approaches Jinny with the papers.
CORONER: Do you want to have the funeral arrangements for Joanne?
JINNY: Yeah, we'll look for a funeral home to bury Joanne. And make this a family and friends only funeral.
The coroner got the message and heads off to the ambulance.
JINNY: (To the gang) Looks like we'll have to find a funeral home and have a family and friends only funeral.
Everybody sombers up in tears.
01-10-2005, 05:39 PM
Ooo gettin good!
01-10-2005, 07:49 PM
June 20th, 1984
IN THE FUNERAL HOME
Mrs. Garrett, Blair, Tootie and Natalie came to the funeral home early to see Jo for the last time. All of them wore black dresses with veils to cover their faces. Blair picked those herself. As they sit in their bench, looking at a open white coffin with gold handles, and Joanne laying in it. Joanne is wearing a white silk dress. Joanne also laid in a Rest In Peace pose like I described before in part two. Her throat slit is enbalmed, also with her face to hide the light blue complexion. Her face still draws sadness.
BLAIR: I guess Jo was right...She was born, she lived, and she dies. That's life.
MRS. GARRETT: She was right, Blair.
A brunette woman came into the funeral, also decked in black. She looked different four years ago. Blair remembered her face.
NANCY: Blair Warner?
Blair and Nancy showed a little happiness, but can't hide the sadness.
NANCY: How's things, Blair?
BLAIR: Good times and bad. (Gestures to Mrs. Garrett) I bet you remember Mrs. Garrett, Nancy.
NANCY: Oh yeah, Mrs. Garrett. Nice to see you again on such a sad time.
TOOTIE: Did the other girls want to come?
NANCY: I called Molly, Sue Ann, and Cindy. They'll make it.
Beverly Ann's voice comes from out of nowhere.
BEVERLY ANN: Hello, girls.
MRS. GARRETT: Hello, Bev.
BEVERLY ANN: How's the store coming along?
MRS. GARRETT: It's getting there.
BEVERLY ANN: I'm also shocked about her death.
MRS. GARRETT: Almost everyone is.
BEVERLY ANN: I hear Kelly is coming along to say goodbye too.
Kelly Affinado came along.
KELLY: Hello guys. I came to see Jo. Is it okay if I sit with you?
MRS. GARRETT: Sure. Sit by the girls.
Kelly finds their bench and is greeted.
BLAIR: Hey, Kelly.
TOOTIE: You're here for Jo, huh?
KELLY: Where else could I be? Hearing that your friend gets killed and then you have to say goodbye. Don't you?
NATALIE: I guess...
A few miutes later, the parlor is full of friends and relatives. Cindy Webster, Molly Parker, Sue Ann Weaver, Nancy Olson, Mr. Polinaczek and Rose Polinaczek, Kelly, Blair, Natalie, Tootie, Mrs. Garrett, Beverly Ann, Andy, George, and Pippa McKenna took turns viewing Jo for the last time, telling the corpse what memories they had. Blair is the one with more memories.
BLAIR: (Looking at the corpse) Jo, we had a lot of good times...and the bad times. I guess...when we get killed by some unknown murderer, that killer would be out in the open...waiting who to hit next without knowing what it looks like...Jo...you are right about one thing...(Tears brimming)...that I'll never forget..."You are born...you live...and you die...that's life..."(Crying uncontrollably) I'll miss you Jo.
A few hours later...the memorial service is now held outside.
A beautiful cemetary with lots of gravestones, trees for shades, and the same people from the parlor attended the burial. Jinny sports her trademark leather overcoat with a black blouse and skirt, and wears Gargoyles Classics sunglasses with the black ice lens (Like the ones in the first Terminator movie). The priest now raises his hands in benefection over the casket...
PRIEST: Ashes to ashes, earth to earth, dust to dust, may the Lord God be with this young woman's soul. We have come to pay our final respects to your servant, Joanna Marie Polniaczek. Joanna has been a strong willed young woman from the Bronx, and learned how to live in a world that is not perfect. Now, another person stabbed a Sword of Hatred into Joanna's flesh, but her soul's heart will be in Heaven. Joanna is now in God's arms. May Joanna Marie Polniaczek rest in peace.
All the others mourn as Joanna's body and her coffin are being lowered. Out of the many who mourned, it's Blair who can't stop crying, for she was crying the hardest. Jinny wraps her arm around Blair.
BLAIR: Now this...(Crying)...is gonna be tough to be without Jo...
JINNY: Just hang tough...and you'll see her soul. I swear it.
Blair hugged Jinny...and Jinny also sheds a small tear.
We fade to black and a title card says "INTERMISSION".
01-11-2005, 05:52 PM
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01-11-2005, 10:52 PM
June 21st, 1984
Six days had passed when Jo Polniaczek passed away.
At Mrs. Garrett's house, Jinny is working hard on the case, and why Boots St. Claire didn't attend the funeral.
JINNY: (To herself, glancing at the register from the funeral home) Why Boots was a no-show, I don't know...Tomorrow, I should go to Langley and find out what she is up to.
In the dorm room, Blair bolted upright, forehead sweating. She screamed, and panted. Natalie and Tootie heard this and approached Blair.
TOOTIE: Did you had a bad dream?!
NATALIE: What happened?
BLAIR: I had a bad dream! A very bad dream...about Jo...and this...this guy dressed in black...
Blair tried to tell the dream, but can't, due to the tears in her eyes.
BLAIR: Can it wait till tomorrow?! I WANT A DRINK! I can't LIVE without Jo!
Blair quickly jumps out of bed and goes out of the dorm room.
NATALIE: (Screaming at Blair) And be drunk like Jinny?
TOOTIE: Be my guest, Blair! (To Natalie) She's spoiled. Bad dreams, alcohol.
NATALIE: Necessities of a snob.
01-12-2005, 01:25 PM
Blair quickly ran downstairs, and went to Jinny.
BLAIR: Jinny! I had a bad dream!
Jinny holds Blair as she heard her cries.
JINNY: Calm down, Blair. Sit down.
Blair releases from her hug, and sits down.
JINNY: Tell me about this dream.
BLAIR: I dreamt...that I was chasing Jo, and in her place was a mysterious figure who was all black.
JINNY: Was it...a Death-like person?
BLAIR: Yeah, and at first I thought it was Boots, but her voice quickly turned to inhuman. I mean robotic in a way. Then, a bad thing happened...This guy smacked me into an alcove! Then...(Crying)...when I snapped out of it, I was chained to the wall!
JINNY: So, what happens next?
BLAIR: This black man told me I was going to be sealed inside...I mean, bury me alive! So...he told Jo to seal me up.
JINNY: What did Jo looked like in a dream?
BLAIR: Jo looked like the one in the casket at the funeral, but her skin was white...red eyes...evil laugh!
JINNY: Dreams like this when you lose a good friend can happen to all of us.
BLAIR: That's not all...as Jo was sealing me up, the guy had a voodoo doll that looks like me, and everytime he sticks a pin into the doll...
JINNY: (Interrupts) The pain causes into a spot where the pin was stuck. I've had cases like that before.
BLAIR: (Crying harder) Then...Jo completely sealed me in, with my chest hurting so bad...I never had a nightmare about my best friend turning against me!!
Blair hugs Jinny.
JINNY: Like I said at the funeral, hang tough in this cruel world, and when you die without taking your life, you'll be with her.
BLAIR: You might be right...but first, let me have a drink before I go to bed.
Blair takes Jinny's Wild Turkey bottle.
JINNY: Hey Blair, you come back with that! That's mine!
BLAIR: (Screaming) When you LOSE your friend, you can drink your troubles away! WHY CAN'T I?!
Jinny quickly races to Blair and grabs her. Blair quickly releases from her grab, and Blair opens the lid. Blair begins to take a big slug from the bottle.
JINNY: Blair, what you're doing is bad! I've been drinking before, but you're not used to alcohol!
BLAIR: So what? I lost Jo, and part of my soul is lost. YOU drink alcohol all the time, now I can DRINK, too!
JINNY: (Taking the bottle) Don't veg out by taking your life soon by this!
Blair, feeling dizzy but addicted, reaches for the bottle.
BLAIR: I want to drink, Jinny!
JINNY: No, you can't! It belongs to me!
BLAIR: We can BOTH drink!
Jinny gives up and hands Blair the Wild Turkey.
JINNY: Okay, have it your way, Blair! Just wait till Edna finds out about you...and you have college tomorrow.
Blair just drinks another swig, making herself dizzy and wanting more. Jinny went back to do her casework.
JINNY: (To herself) Besides, I gotta go undercover to see what Boots is up to...and what a bizarre dream.
01-12-2005, 03:57 PM
June 22nd, 1984
At Mrs. Garrett's house, Blair has woken up with a slight hangover from last night. She grips Jinny's empty Wild Turkey bottle. Somebody came along, ungrips the bottle, and bangs it against the metal ashcan.
Blair bolts up and sees Jinny.
BLAIR: It's you. That stuff tastes...good!
JINNY: Yeah, like your breath. I told Edna about your behavior. And man, was she mad!
BLAIR: You...TOLD HER ON ME?! I DON'T BELIEVE YOU!!
Mrs. Garrett came with a tray of breakfast, mad at Blair. She puts it down and marches towards Blair.
MRS. GARRETT: What was it with you and your alcohol spell, Blair?
BLAIR: I drank it to get my problems of Jo off my mind!!
MRS. GARRETT: You are gonna be in a heap of trouble when you come back from college.
BLAIR: I'm never gonna go back to this zoo without Jo! I had some apologies for Jo, but when she died IT WAS TOO LATE! What's to have a talk about!?
JINNY: You blew your chance to hang tough, didn't you?
BLAIR: (Standing up) Being drunk or NOT, I can't get Jo off of my mind...AND YOU CAN'T MAKE ME! The hell with breakfast, I'll go to college alone!
Blair got her purse and storms out of the house.
Boots St. Claire bumped into Blair, but never said 'hello'.
BOOTS: Hello! What's up with Warnsey?
MRS. GARRETT: She was drunk last night.
BOOTS: Oh MYYYYYYY! Wouldn't be about Joanne Marie, wouldn't it?
JINNY: Where did you hear about Jo?
BOOTS: The papers yesterday! Sad funeral for a fallen tomboy!
JINNY: Didn't you feel sad that Jo was killed?
BOOTS: Why should I be? Jo WAS a tomboy, and tomboys don't DIE like sissies!
JINNY: Where were you when the funeral took place?
BOOTS: I had college work, doing fashion sketches for Blair.
JINNY: So you never cared for Jo's death?
BOOTS: Never. I didn't like that girl who thinks she was so tough.
Boots looked at her Swatch again.
BOOTS: Almost time for college! Gotta meet Blair! Ta-tah!
Boots ran off.
MRS. GARRETT: Now this is weird, Boots never showed sympathy for Jo.
JINNY: That's what I'm suspicioning. I like to go to Langley to find out about Boots.
MRS. GARRETT: I tell the girls and of the opposite sex that snooping is not allowed, but since you're an inspector, I'll let you.
JINNY: Thank you, Edna. (Puts on overcoat) I'll be back with more info.
Jinny leaves. Mrs. Garrett thinks about what to do with breakfast.
MRS. GARRETT: Guess it can wait until tomorrow.
Mrs. Garrett picks the tray and heads for the kitchen.
01-13-2005, 05:55 PM
BOOTS DID IT!!!!!
Sry had to get that out. Post more soon!!
01-14-2005, 01:20 PM
Later that day...
The Langley College. Blair parks her car, and gets out. She checks if it is locked. It is, and went to Boots who was anxoiusly waiting.
BOOTS: Warnsey, what's eating you?
BLAIR: I had a big, terrible nightmare about Jo, and you wouldn't BELIEVE how terrible it was!
BOOTS: Why don't you tell me about it in my dorm room, Warnsey?
BLAIR: Ok, but you won't like it. I told it to Jinny, and I even drank some alcohol last night.
BOOTS: (Fanning Blair's breath) I can tell! Gotta be careful with alcohol.
BLAIR: And also, that Jinny's a big nutcase. Whenever I want to drink, Jinny was watching me like a hawk!
BOOTS: That Jinny IS a little bug. (Bell rings) Hey, we gotta get to class. After class, tell me about your dream.
As they went into the main foyer, Jinny also arrived at the college. She gets out and starts to haed inside the foyer.
Inside the college, Jinny goes to the headmaster's desk. The headmaster looks in bewilderment about Jinny's appearance.
HEADMASTER: Jo? Aren't you dead? I've heard about your death...
JINNY: (Cutting in) You mistook me for Jo. I'm Jinny Exstead. (Flashes badge) The Division of San Francisco. I've been hired to solve the crime around Jo Polniaczek's murderer.
HEADMASTER: Oh yes. Sorry about the identity. Who are you looking for?
JINNY: I gotta round up some suspects. One is Boots St. Claire.
HEADMASTER: I know about her happenings since Jo was buried.
JINNY: (In action) Alright, where was she?
HEADMASTER: Boots was here in this spot after I heard the news about Jo's funeral. When Boots came to me, I told her "Aren't you supposed to be at the funeral? You were Jo's friend." She came to me with a high pitched "Jo was a nobody. A tough girl who grew up in the Bronx is nothing. Nothing to prove. Tough guys deserve to go to hell." I went "BOOTS! It is NOT true! Tough and weak people alike can go to Heaven!"
JINNY: Really, and that's when Boots began to hate Jo for her tomboy strength, huh?
HEADMASTER: Correct. When Boots came here last year and discovered Jo with Blair, she started to be mean at her, and drew more close to Blair. But Blair remained close to Jo as a best friend would. But Boots, on the other hand, went to her friends and teased Jo whenever Jo is nowhere in sight with Blair. Blair defended Jo's friendship, but Boots remained Blair's friend for life.
JINNY: A triangle of friends. Where can I find Boots and Blair?
HEADMASTER: Algebra, room 208. But I wouldn't reccommend you going in there during class.
JINNY: (Smiling) I know. Thank you for the clues.
The headmaster waved and Jo went outside the college.
At the outside of the college, Jinny tries to think of the way to get inside the Algebra class. She sees an attractive female student with Jinny's looks. Jinny thinks it's a perfect match.
Jinny went to her and asks..."Hey, would you show me the bathroom? I gotta go."
STUDENT: I'll show you. Say, have I seen you somewhere before?
JINNY: No, you think I look like Jo?
STUDENT: Boy, I'll say. (Gestures to the bathroom) Here we are. Mind if I can show you in?
They went inside, and once the door was closed...Jinny did one of her jujitsu moves on the student.
Minutes later, Jinny came in with the attractive student's clothes on, college books on her arm, and the student ID card on the lapel. She now feels ready. She goes back into the college.
01-15-2005, 04:26 PM
A few hours later, Jinny was at the college library. Jinny sat at a nearby desk, and studied Boots' and Blair's bond.
JINNY: (To herself) They were at algebra alright, but still, I gotta figujre out what they are up to.
Jinny sees Boots picking up a book about...Guns and Weapons. Jinny quickly went to Boots.
BOOTS: Hello, hello, Janet!
JINNY: (The attractive student Jinny is impersonating) Yo Boots. Got any good arms?
BOOTS: Yeppers, and I'm gonna show them to Blair. Wanna come with us?
JINNY: Absolutely. Lead me the way.
Finally, Jinny is going places with the first batch of evidence.
Boots and Jinny (As Janet) arrived at the desk where Blair is studying Boots' fashion sketches.
BLAIR: Hi, Boots. Hi, Janet.
JINNY: Hey there.
BOOTS: Blair, we got some good gun books for our black market deal.
BLAIR: Great, Boots! What you got?
Boots stacks the pile of weapon books hear Blair.
BOOTS: We got "The Weapons of 1984", "Guns and Ammo" annual of pistols, The Assault Rifle Guide. If we can buy these weapons at the black market, we can hire someone to get rid of those nutcases. Right, Janet?
JINNY: Yeah, but we gotta have a GOOD sniper rifle.
Blair flips through one of the books and finds one subject about a sniper rifle.
BLAIR: How about this?
Blair points at the sniper rifle.
BOOTS: A Dragunov SSV-58?
JINNY: Nope. It's too...Russian.
BOOTS: (Flips through another page) Hey Blair! How about this: A HK PGS1?
Blair is quite impressed.
BLAIR: That's a COOL looking sniper rifle, Boots!
BOOTS: I'll see if I can buy this rifle, and after we get it, we'll hire someone to get rid of the Exstead girl.
Jinny is in a state of shock!
BLAIR: How about...Marie Lubbock? She's one of our friends from Long Island.
BOOTS: Nice idea! I got her phone number. Do you think Marie Lubbock will be good for the assassination plot?
JINNY: (Shaken up) I...I guess...
BLAIR: It's settled! Call Marie when we get the weapons with the PSG-1, and we'll have fun!
JINNY: You guys go on, and I gotta go, girls. BYE!
BOOTS: Come again soon!
As Jinny went away, Blair and Boots talk about "Janet".
BLAIR: Boots, Janet is always excited about crimes, but I never seen her like this.
BOOTS: Why should she be so scared of a simple plot to kill Jinny?
Jinny ran out of the college, donning her overcoat, and ran to the Starion. She gets in, and roars the engine and drove off.
JINNY: (Shocked and panting) Blair and Boots are gonna have my head shot! And who's Marie Lubbock?
The car zips through the street as we pan on the city.
01-15-2005, 09:27 PM
Boots did it!!!
01-15-2005, 11:11 PM
Jinny finally arrived at Mrs. Garrett's house. Natalie and Tootie are doing homework while Mrs. Garrett is busy book-keeping the store. Jinny ran out of breath as she came in.
TOOTIE: What's a matter?
MRS. GARRETT: What's the urgency?
JINNY: I was at college where Blair studies, and I overheard Blair and Boots at the library sayin' something about an assassination plot to fuel Blair's hatred for losing Jo and having me on their tail.
NATALIE: Got more gossip on this?
JINNY: No gossip in this one. This is serious. They have weapon books instead of study books.
The girls and Mrs. Garrett gasp in horror.
MRS. GARRETT: OUR BLAIR...INTO WEAPONS!?
TOOTIE: IS THAT REAL?!
JINNY: Yeah. They're into the Black Market. They buy international pistols from their dorm room.
MRS. GARRETT: That Blair is REALLY going to get it.
JINNY: Here's more. I heard that Blair and Boots are buying a HK PSG-1.
TOOTIE: What's a PSG-1?
NATALIE: Yeah, what is it?
JINNY: Sniper Rifle.
MRS. GARRETT: For what, Jinny?
JINNY: They...want me dead.
GIRLS: (Unison) How?!
JINNY: Blair fueled her hatred for missing Jo, and she thinks I'm making her full of trouble. All I ever did was help her.
MRS. GARRETT: It's not you...It's Blair's use of alcohol that got herself in this mess!
JINNY: I tried to stop her...I feel like it's my fault.
MRS. GARRETT: It's not. It's Blair's.
JINNY: When they get their weapons, they're gonna hire someone to have my head.
JINNY: Their friend...Marie Lubbock.
MRS. GARRETT: I heard of that name. She is one of Dewey High's bright students, and is the daughter of the P.E. Teacher, Graham Lubbock. Marie met with Blair and Boots on special occasions.
JINNY: Well, I gotta head for Dewey High tomorrow. Maybe I can talk to Marie.
Jinny walks up the stairs while Mrs. Garrett and the girls look bewildered.
At the dorm room in Edna's house, Jinny looks at the previous clues and the current ones.
JINNY: (Looking at slip of paper) "Boots misses funeral due to fashion sketch drawing", "Boots was at college during funeral", "Boots met Blair at the library to think of killing Jinny", "They buy PSG-1 from black market", and "They hire Marie Lubbock to snipe Jinny". (To herself) I have to see Marie quickly before Blair and Boots get the weapons.
01-18-2005, 03:15 PM
The next day came, and Jinny arrived at Dewey High in Long Island.
Jinny steps inside Dewey High, and she saw a lot of high schoolers...but the high schooler she's looking for is Marie Lubbock. Jinny went to the principal's office.
JINNY: Lady? I'm Jinny Exstead of the Division of San Francisco.
The principal stood up from her desk chair, and went to Jinny.
PRINCIPAL: Carol Higgins, principal of Dewey High.
JINNY: I'm here on a big case involving one of your students.
CAROL: And who might that be?
JINNY: Marie Lubbock.
CAROL: Has she done anything wrong?
JINNY: I heard from those two women from Langley College has a link with Marie. Here are these two pictures.
Jinny hands two pictures of Blair and Boots to Carol.
CAROL: Blair Warner and Boots St. Claire. Two best friends of Marie.
JINNY: I heard Marie is involved in a crime that dealt with Jo Polniaczek's death.
CAROL: How can that be? Marie's our bright, class A student.
JINNY: I also heard they're gonna hire Marie to kill me in an assassination plot.
CAROL: Wow, is Marie involved in a crime ring Graham doesn't know about?
JINNY: She joins Blair and Boots in Black Market dealings.
CAROL: Firearms, rifles, and all that stuff?
CAROL: I'll get her here.
Carol goes to the intercom.
Next shot is in Geography class with Marie Lubbock listening to the teacher's lecture. Marie is 16 years, long brunette hair, blue eyed, and wears specs like a geek. She is busy as usual, writing down the notes until...
CAROL: (via Intercom) Marie Elizabeth Lubbock, please report to the principal's office at once!
Marie heard this, and she quickly went out of the class.
TEACHER: Marie! No running!
Minutes later, an interrogation at the pricipal's office takes place. With Jinny, Marie, and Carol are Graham and Elizabeth Lubbock, Marie's parents.
JINNY: Marie, how did you get involved with weapons?
MARIE: I only study History about the firearms. I never was involved with death and killing.
ELIZABETH: You see, Jinny, she is a saintly student, and believes in Catholicism.
JINNY: (To Marie) When did you hook up with Blair and Boots?
MARIE: They found me when I was studying art design. They hire me to come up with cool designs for their fashions...
GRAHAM: (Interrupting) Let's get to the point of a plot to murder this here inspector. When will you kill (Pointing to Jinny) that?
MARIE: I was NOT there at Langley at the time! I was HERE all the time, daddy!
Graham was about to go on, but Jinny cuts him off.
JINNY: Only when Blair and Boots get the HK PSG-1 rifle.
Graham and Elizabeth grow more fearful.
JINNY: (Caring, to Marie) I was at Langley when they met, and I heard they'll hire you to kill me...but I know you never kill people as part of your Catholic code. I'll help you get out of this. I have another question. When did you begin to hear about this Black Market deal?
MARIE: When Blair and Boots bought a Bowie Commando Knife...and hired me to kill a clerk...but I took it to my apartment...and used it as a pearing knife.
JINNY: Did Blair and Boots know you didn't kill that store clerk?
MARIE: Yeah, they knew...they pinned the first strike on me. They hired some latino girl to kill him...
JINNY: What was the second strike?
MARIE: (Sobbing) Blair and Boots gave me a Walther PPK to kill another civilian. I pawned the gun to the pawn shop to get the money for the "Help the Catholics" fund.
JINNY: Then this would be the final strike if you don't kill me, right?
Marie now can't control her sanity.
MARIE: I DON'T WANT TO KILL!!
Marie hugs Jinny very tightly.
GRAHAM: Carol, I guess was a bit to rough on Marie.
ELIZABETH: She's always very good.
CAROL: That's what I thought too.
JINNY: (To Marie) With all my heart, I'll try to solve this.
MARIE: Will you do that for me?
JINNY: I swear to my heart. One hundred percent.
Jinny releases Marie from their long hug.
JINNY: How about me seeing Marie sometime, just to see that Blair and Boots don't deliver the guns to her?
GRAHAM: Yeah, I love to have you visit her every now and then.
ELIZABETH: (Crying) Will you please do that, inspector?
JINNY: Yeah. I give you my word.
GRAHAM: Thank you, Jinny.
CAROL: (To Marie) Well, Marie. You're free to go.
MARIE: Thank you guys!
She happily walks out of the office.
In Mrs. Garrett's house at night...
Mrs. Garrett, Jinny, Natalie and Tootie are having dinner, without Blair.
TOOTIE: That Blair is always missing!
NATALIE: Maybe it's time to put up every missing persons ad of Blair all over town.
JINNY: I got more details on the case.
MRS. GARRETT: What's up now?
JINNY: I went to Dewey High today, and went to see Marie Lubbock.
TOOTIE: Did she get involved?
JINNY: She did NOT get involved in any crime Blair and Boots got her to do. First, they gave her a commando knife to kill a clerk, but decided to use it as a pearing knife. Second, she had a Walther PPK, but pawned it for fund money. Now she doesn't want to kill me since she doesn't like murder.
NATALIE: Looks like Marie's not the criminal?
JINNY: Not at the slightest.
01-18-2005, 06:10 PM
01-18-2005, 10:46 PM
In the next morning, at Langley College. At the dorm room, Blair and Boots finally got the delivery.
BOOTS: Alrighty, we got the goods!
BLAIR: Finally! Let's see what we got!
Boots laid the package on the table, and opened the lid. Once they opened it, Blair and Boots got a good glimpse at these exotic weapons. First, Boots pulled out a sniper rifle.
BOOTS: Lookee! A HK PSG-1! A great weapon for Marieeeeeeee!
BLAIR: Very flashy!
Blair puts her arm in the box to find another flashy rifle.
BLAIR: Holy cow, look at this!
BOOTS: What you got?
BLAIR: It looks like...a Barrett M-82A1 caliber .50 rifle.
BOOTS: Cool! We'll make that a reserve rifle.
BLAIR: Hey, we got more!
BOOTS: (Looking at another gun she held) I know this model!
BLAIR: What is it?
BOOTS: A Beretta. Beretta M93R-AG.
BLAIR: (In joy) We've struck it rich! Now we'll hire Marie to kill Jinny tonight!!
BOOTS: You bet! Tonight, we'll have our assistants get Marie to shoot that crazy inspector, and your guilt is gone!
3:00 PM in Long Island. Jinny arrived at the apartment complex.
Once she got inside, Jinny reached the 6th floor. She went to apartment 6-22. Jinny knocked several times. The door opened and a boy of 10 years, dressed like Freddy tried to scare Jinny, but Jinny knew it was a costume.
BOY: All trespassers will be stabbed!
JINNY: I'm an inspector, and will be much obliged to see Marie Lubbock.
BOY: So you're that chick that you saw Marie at high school? Come right in. (Jinny came in) See, my mom and dad are out doing some charity, but you can meet some of my other sisters before you go to Marie. By the way, I'm J.R.
JINNY: Nice to meet you.
The four other sisters are watching MTV on their old TV set.
J.R.: These are my four other chicks in the gang. Hey girls, I want you to meet this young inspector for Marie. Jinny.
GIRL #1: (The aubrn haired girl with a ponytail) Hey, I'm Connie.
GIRL #2: (The blonde with the slender legs) I'm Wendy.
GIRL #3: (The brunette with a sexy chest) I'm Cindy.
GIRL #4: (The small one) And I'm Sherry.
JINNY: Pleased to meet...all of you.
Marie came from the bedroom to see what the meeting is about.
MARIE: Hello, I wonder what is going...Oh, Jinny I'm glad you're here. (To the others sans Jinny) Will you excuse us, please? This is private.
In the kids' room later...
JINNY: I was at Langley today, and I was disguised as their friend Janet. I discovered that their shipment has been brought, and not only they had a HK PSG-1, but they have two more weapons.
MARIE: Geez! (Adjusting her glasses) What weapons are they?
JINNY: A Barrett M-82A1 rifle and a Beretta M93R-AG. As soon as they're ready, they're sending in a couple of hitmen to force you to killing me.
MARIE: Do you think...those hitmen killed Jo?
JINNY: That's what I'm tryin' to figure out.
MARIE: Hey, I'll be careful. If I see those guys, I'll call you.
JINNY: Good. I'll be there ASAP.
MARIE: Thanks for your help, Jinny.
Later on, at night, a black Pontiac Trans Am has drove to the back alley of the apartment complex. The car came to a full stop, and two black figures came out. They approached the fireladder, and slowly stepped up rung by rung. They got their rifles and handguns at the ready. Finally, they reached the sixth floor.
The first figure tapped on the window. Inside the kids' room, Marie is studying for her physics test. She hears the knocking.
MARIE: Window's open.
The two black figures came in, and the two spoke in strange, deep girl voices.
FIGURE #1: Marie Elizabeth Lubbock?
On the other side, J.R. is about to go to the bathroom, but when he hears this conversation, J.R. placed the tape recorder against the door, and pressed the record button.
MARIE: Yes, it's me.
FIGURE #2: Blair and Boots told us to give you the HK PSG-1 so you can eliminate Jinny Exstead.
MARIE: What do you want with me?
FIGURE #1: Simple, geek! It's just to kill a lousy inspector! You'll get a bounty, in prior of the two jobs you failed.
MARIE: I did NOT want to do crime in my life! All I do for them is to make sketches for Warner Industries!
FIGURE #2: Warner Industries is NOT what you think it is. The Black Market that Blair and Boots belong to, Warner bought it as the 2nd industry!
MARIE: (Shocked) WHAT?! I've been working for the Black Market all along, and those girls didn't tell me?! I thought those girls do petty crimes! ME, I'm a HAPPY CATHOLIC!! I carry a cross every time, I think of myself as a wench, but NOT a STINKING criminal!
FIGURE #1: But you ARE friends with Blair and Boots, right?
FIGURE #2: Take this rifle and KILL EXSTEAD!
MARIE: No! I will NOT do another dastardly deed for Blair and Boots again! No matter how many strikes I get...
Marie's sentence is cut off when figure #2 pulls out the Beretta M93R, and shoots Marie near the heart! Blood splurts and smoke begins to come out of the wound.
MARIE: (Wide-eyed and surpised) You...SHOT ME!!
Then, figure #2 shoots 2 more bullets at Marie's glasses, one bullet penetrating Marie's left eye, and another for her right eye, making them bloody and Marie went blind.
MARIE: (Screams inhumanly) AHHHHHH!!!! I CAN'T SEE!!! WAIT!!! I'll do what they say! Give me my sight back!!
FIGURE #2: Since you hate death and murder, we decided to blind you.
MARIE: (Screaming) Even though Jinny is with me, I can still live!
FIGURE #1: You know what the real tragedy is, you geek? They could've been REAL friends...(Figure #1 loads the Barrett .50)...but you wouldn't go through any other channels...
Marie shakes her head in fear as she covers her bloody eyes.
FIGURE #1: YOU went over THEIR heads!
Marie's heart begins to beat slowly, and wounds raise up the pain.
FIGURE #2: That hurts, doesn't it? But life goes on! All fun and glory, huh, Lubbock? It helps if you think of it as a game...cause every game has gotta have a winner...
Figure #1 aims the Barrett rifle at Marie's forehead.
FIGURE #2: ...and a loser. (To figure #1) Shoot the geek.
Figure #1 obeys...Marie gives out one final scream for help, and then...
FIGURE #2: They're cashing you out, Marie.
Figure #1 shot Marie's forehead, and slumps to the ground.
On the other side, the sisters still watch MTV, but Connie heard the gunshots from the kids' room. Connie ran to J.R. and interrupts his recording.
CONNIE: Did you hear Marie yelling?
J.R.: Sure did, sis! It was a blast!
CONNIE: You BRAT! How dare you not help her? I'm going in myself!
Connie kicks in the door and sees the two figures going out the window. Connie screams...
CONNIE: HOLD IT!!!
The figures obey and came into the room again. Connie looks at Marie's dead body. Trying to hide the tears, Connie sobs at them...
CONNIE: You jerks...what did you do that for?
FIGURE #2: None of your business, girl! Ohhhhh, (Loads the Beretta again) you're her sister?
CONNIE: Yeah, and you guys killed her!
FIGURE #1: How'd you like to go with her to the resurrection...the Catholic way?
CONNIE: If her soul dies, I die!
FIGURE #2: Have a nice trip!
Figure #2 shot Constance right in the heart, causing her to die instantly. J.R. stayed at a distance that's safe. Figure #2 drops the Beretta on Constance's body and figure #1 drops a Walther P99 on Marie's body. They quickly went out of the window.
J.R. goes into the den, and looks at the rolodex to find Jinny's address.
J.R.: (Reading) Jinny...920 Main St., 1-555-...
J.R. quickly went to the phone and we see J.R.'s fingers touching the buttons.
01-19-2005, 05:20 PM
BOOTS!!! OK I'm gunna do this till we figure out who-dunnit
01-19-2005, 06:14 PM
Later on that night, at the apartment complex, the ambulance and police are at the Lubbock apartment. Elizabeth is crying after seeing Marie and Connie's bodies wheeled out. Jinny is on the crime scene.
JINNY: You sure that they killed each other?
ELIZABETH: Yes...with those scary guns.
GRAHAM: I don't own these handguns.
JINNY: (Examining the baggie with the guns inside) I'm pretty sure you don't.
J.R. quickly came to them with the tape recorder.
J.R.: Wait! I have evidence for Jinny to hear!
ELIZABETH: Not now, J.R.! We're trying to deal with this!
JINNY: Hang on! Maybe he has something.
GRAHAM: It better not be one of those pranks.
Jinny presses the play button and she hears...
MARIE: What do you want with me?
FIGURE #1: Simple, geek! It's just to kill a lousy inspector! You'll get a bounty, in prior of the two jobs you failed.
MARIE: I did NOT want to do crime in my life! All I do for them is to make sketches for Warner Industries!
FIGURE #2: Warner Industries is NOT what you think it is. The Black Market that Blair and Boots belong to, Warner bought it as the 2nd industry!
Jinny presses "Stop", and the parents are baffled.
ELIZABETH: So...Marie and Connie didn't blew themselves away...
GRAHAM: Somebody got them.
J.R.: So was this Warner Industries deal.
JINNY: Now, it looks like TWO killers I have to track down. Blair and Boots must've hired them! I'm sorry but I gotta go to Langley!
Jinny rushed by the sisters, the medics and police. She gets out of the complex and into her Starion. She revs the engine and goes on the path to Langley.
01-19-2005, 06:47 PM
She arrived at Langley, nighttime. Jinny used stealth techniques to get into Blair and Boots' dorm room. She got in by using her lock pick, and she opened the door. She flipped on the light.
Jinny crept to the desk to find some files from Warner Industries and the Black Market. Jinny flipped through them and read aloud...
JINNY: "Warner...HK PSG-1 bought from Alexadrov Kagro from Russia for $2,500." (Another page) "WI buys Colt, Smith and Wesson, Beretta, etc. for arms deals..." (To herself) Those creeps are not fashion designers or businesswomen.
Jinny went to the wardrobe, opened the doors to find...black clothing of all fabrics, loads of weapons, etc. She also looks at a piece of paper from the leather jacket. It says...
JINNY: "You dumb inspector. You were late. Our guys killed Marie and that sister of hers. Go to the Langley Gym to get your killers."
Jinny obeys this note, and went out of the room, closing the door.
At the Langley Gym, the big place is set up like a boxing match, sans no big audience. Jinny walked inside, only to hear her own footsteps echoing.
JINNY: Guys! I know you're in here! Come out!
Jinny picks up another note. It says "COME IN THE RING". Jinny is not sure what they meant by that...but Jinny approached the ring anyway.
JINNY: Alright, now I'm in the ring! Now show yourselves!
After a few seconds, the figure with a garrote climbed in the ring. Getting the garrote to be tightened, the figure goes slowly for Jinny as she slowly walks out of the ring. When the figure is about to get the garrote on Jinny's neck, she senses it...and puts her left hand in front of her neck to stop the garrote cord from entering her neck! Then, Jinny does her jiujutsu toss on the figure as the figure is flipped into the canvas.
Figure #2 stepped up the plate as the second figure hits Jinny to the face with a roundhouse kick. Jinny felt the sting on her face as she looks at the figures in the dark ring.
JINNY: Looks like you're not alone.
FIGURE #1: We're definitely not.
FIGURE #2: And we are not killers of Jo.
JINNY: But you killed Marie and Connie Lubbock.
FIGURE #1: So we did. Their parents thought they killed each other.
JINNY: Bull! Evidence via tape recorder shows that you killed Marie because she didn't want to cooperate with Blair and Boots.
FIGURE #2: YOU butted in our business!?
FIGURE #1: That's it, inspector! I'll kick your ass back to San Fran!
JINNY: You got it.
When Figure #1 pulls a left jab at Jinny, but Jinny lashes out an elbow jab.
JINNY: Whoever you are, you have a right to remain silent...
Figure #1 spits blood.
FIGURE #1: Damn you!
Jinny then does the Axe Bomber clothesline on Figure #1 and landed on the canvas.
FIGURE #1: (Getting up) HEY! Wait a minute! I'm a protected woman!
Figure #2 gestures Figure #1 to shut up about not revealing it's identity.
JINNY: You have the right to an attorney...
Jinny does a buzzsaw kick on figure #1.
FIGURE #1 (Stricken by the kick) What is this...
As the figure laid out on the floor, Jinny puts the butterfly lock on figure #1.
FIGURE #1: (Jinny applying pressure) ALRIGHT! ALRIGHT! Listen to me, you PI jerk! There's another dude...SHE'S...Langley College's best...I'm her number two!
JINNY: We'll see after I take off this mask of yours.
As Jinny was taking off the mask, figure #2 now has the garrote cord and begins to lunge at Jinny's neck again, but she rolled to the other side of the ring letting go of her lock.
JINNY: Anything will be said against you!!
FIGURE #1: I GIVE UP!! LET ME GO AND I'LL TALK!!!
Jinny stands up, and listens to the prey. Figure #1 removes the mask...and it's...
FIGURE #1: (Unmasked) WE KILLED JO POLNIACZEK!!!
Figure #2 was forced to take off the mask too. It definitely was...
BOOTS: It was us! I was the number one, and Blair was my number two.
BLAIR: See, we work for the Black Market when my dad was forced to buy arms dealers to the industries.
JINNY: So there were no other assistants?
BOOTS: Nope, just us two cheery, but naughty criminals.
JINNY: How did you kill Jo?
BLAIR: (Swallows) Well, when we were off for college the day Jo lived, I met Boots. She had a ladder leading to our bathroom. This is where Boots came in. She was all decked on leather, and she climbed into the dorm room's window. She crept into the bathroom and hid in the bathtub until Jo went inside. To tell the truth...I want the money just to kill Jo.
JINNY: Who ordered you both to kill Jo?
BOOTS: We had to do what the Black Market said...or we'd kiss ourselves away.
JINNY: Now, you gals have three counts: one of Jo's death, two for the Lubbock sisters' deaths, and three: the black market deals. What do you have to say?
BLAIR: All we can say...is that we're sorry for what we've done, and I wish we'll never have to pay.
JINNY: Well, we got evidence for your crimes...and I have no choice but to say...you both are under arrest.
Blair and Boots are shocked.
01-19-2005, 09:44 PM
At Mrs. Garrett's house, Mrs. Garrett, Natalie, and Tootie are waiting anxoiusly about Jinny's case. There is a knock...and Natalie got it. She opens it.
NATALIE: Blair? Boots?
JINNY: These two criminals want to say something to you.
MRS. GARRETT: What on earth happened to you?!
BOOTS: We killed your tomboy girl.
The girls were surprised.
NATALIE: WHAT? How did you kill Jo?!
TOOTIE: HOW COULD YOU?!
BLAIR: Boots was the one who strangled her...and I helped her get inside the dorm room.
JINNY: These girls also did more crimes.
MRS. GARRETT: What were they, Blair?! I want to hear them!
BOOTS: We killed the Lubbock geek along with her sister to prevent Jinny from getting us.
Mrs. Garrett furiously approaches Blair.
MRS. GARRETT: Now...now...YOU'RE NO LONGER A PART OF US!
JINNY: They'll be facing jail charges for 5 years for 3 counts of murder and conspiracy with Warner Industries.
BLAIR: The Black Market took over Warner Industries and we had to do what the boss says.
BOOTS: They made us buy heavy artillery for assassination plots.
BLAIR: For large bounties of money.
TOOTIE: So you kept a secret from us?
BLAIR: I had to...
NATALIE: And your father made you girls kill Jo?
BLAIR: Yes. Because Boots knew I didn't like Jo in the past. So my father made a deal that we should kill Jo...and we did.
MRS. GARRETT: Good Lord... What will your friends say that you killed them?
BLAIR: (Sighs heavily) We killed them and they'll never be friends again.
MRS. GARRETT: You're darn right about it.
JINNY: Well, I gotta go turn them over to the police, and I gotta pack up and go back to San Fran after I drop them in prison.
MRS. GARRETT: Okay, Jinny. Thanks for your help.
Jinny waves goodbye as she shoves Blair and Boots outside.
In the final scene, we zoom out slowly to Jinny taking Blair and Boots into Jinny's rented Starion, and Jinny went off into the night. Mrs. Garrett, Natalie and Tootie look in shock, sadness, and who knows, their lost friendship.
01-19-2005, 09:45 PM
There you go, ninteen chapters of suspense, mystery, and crime action from a novice writer. Now's the time for your reviews.
01-20-2005, 05:55 PM
This was great I really liked it, even though i figured it out u did a great job
01-20-2005, 07:07 PM
I'm glad to hear that. Even though you knew the who-dunnit, I feel great that you loved it.
Rebel Queen 1980
01-21-2005, 11:21 PM
It was a good story.
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